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Postby al » Sun Jun 06, 2004 4:25 am

It's really too bad I cannot contribute because my real talents lies with tennis. Maybe, I can post my winning scores. :D So I'm here to cheer you guys on. :o Now thinking about what I said, I better have a crack at it. :x Maybe in a weeks time, my terrible poem will be ready. :oops:

nessieq, I'm looking forward to hearing you sing and play with your band to that wonderful poem you wrote. :P
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Postby al » Sat Jun 12, 2004 7:33 am

This is my first time writing a poem ever, so be nice. I'm not used to being this restricted this much. I used some tennis terms hopefully you will be able to understand it. My poem is about Tennis, I think. Don't take it seriously, there's a little comedy.

My world is flat
It is definitely not simple as saying, just like that
Not dimensionless I'm sure, that is a fact!
I hope I'm not just an opening act.

I live in "no man's land"
Because the world is out of hand
Silly, if you think tennis is really just a game
Then everyone is to be blame
For the world in flame
It's a little amusing
Laugh while the world is corroding
Open your hearts and undue what was trained
Our world is the game.

Someday I may like to coach
Today I like to serve and poach
So listen clear
This you probably did not hear
Tennis can be like an art
Where you can open the door to your heart
To search yourself
So you can know yourself
So you can be yourself
The real goal is to balance yourself
Because the enemy starts from within
Just don't get flustered and don't join in.
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Postby Garbo » Sat Jun 12, 2004 7:37 am

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Postby al » Sat Jun 12, 2004 8:16 am

Thank you, Garbo. I better sleep now before I really don't make sense. :D
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Postby nessieq » Sat Jun 12, 2004 5:38 pm

your poems really good, al, specially for a first timer.
i finished recording the backing track for did you ever yesterday, and there's talk of our band getting a gig sometime this summer, we've been offered one, but simon's sck at the mo so we'll have to wait and see...
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And the end of all our exploring
Will be to arrive where we started
And know the place for the first time.
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Postby Garbo » Sat Jun 12, 2004 6:44 pm

Good luck with the gig, nessieq!! When you get your stuff recorded you'll have to send it to us.
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Postby al » Sat Jun 12, 2004 7:47 pm

nessieq, you really like my poem? :shock: Thank you very much. I will not feel shy anymore in posting it.

That's kool news that you have. I cannot wait to hear the material. :P And good luck with your gig !!! Keep us inform. Summer is near. Yay!!! :P
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Postby Garbo » Sun Jun 13, 2004 3:31 am

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Postby al » Tue Jun 15, 2004 5:39 pm

If that's true then all poems are songs and vice versa. If that's the case, then I prefer the style that flows better. The poem from Emily Dickinson's is a little out there for me. It doesn't sound smooth at all. Maybe I have to appreciate it on a different level. I guess it's like with all new things, you prefer the sweetest stuff over anything else but as you live with it longer you tend to go away from it, just like in wine.
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Postby Garbo » Tue Jun 15, 2004 6:34 pm

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Postby al » Tue Jun 15, 2004 11:27 pm

Wow! Garbo, you open a new world in poetry for me. Thank you. If I'm not so busy, I would definitely spend more time on it. I see you have a great passion for poetry and it seems like you are in the business. I'm looking forward to seeing some, of course after it is published. By the way, I enjoy your stories very much and the role playing stories about princess Moya. :P
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Postby al » Wed Jun 16, 2004 11:28 pm

You know how to get me curious, Garbo. I'm going to the bookstore and study what Emily Dickinson means when she talks about water. :P While I'm over there, would you recommend some poets for me, who specializes in poems about astronomy with love.
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Postby Jim » Thu Jun 17, 2004 2:03 am

al wrote:would you recommend some poets for me, who specializes in poems about astronomy with love.


OK, here's one just for you!

She held my hand as I looked in the scope
at the Andromeda Galaxy, and I had high hopes
that she would kiss me that night
before the stinger of Scorpius dropped out of sight.

Moving back westward into the Milky Way
I saw the North America Nebula directly overhead.
Just my naked eye and a filter is all it took
and I dreamed she and I would soon be wed.

I pointed the scope at Albireo.
One star said "stop", the other said "go".
But who cares what say the stars in the skies
when the answer is in her eyes.

Must pack my things away now, as the dark past goes away
and the future comes with the light of a thousand suns.
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Dieu de service, et Dieu seulement.
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